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You've the oil of gladness ,
when will you pour it over all
when willl the tense relax
when will the sound of singing
be heard again

Because of you
the rain is diamond drops
the cool grass magic
the sky holds a secret
only lovers can decode
my joy's full.

Fingers stretched out
barely touching when
will the lovers
embrace again. pregnant
when will they hear babies first cry

Hearts are waiting
to hear the trump of their
lovers call .
when will princes
walking start riding again

Come pour your oil of gladness
just a drop will do
let the lovers meet in sweet embrace
let the rain drops be diamonds again
and the soft grass magic again

Feedback submitted by Sue Simpson at sooz.006@virgin.net on 28th July 2002

I don't like that the last two lines both ended in 'again' but other than that this is really pretty. Some lovely phrases, diamond raindrops and skies that only lover's can decode. That's so true a starry sky is just a pretty starry sky until you are with a lover and then it's a blanket of awesome beauty. Lovely writing.

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